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Re: Tiptoe Holligans Blues #1
Tenses eyes follow my feet They make sure my steps ain’t to far left And that my shoes are still brown Together we engage in the most awful theft Building ...
Jun 16, 2008 -
Re: Of Our Fellow Men
theres some nice lines but overall it does lack some imagery to help your ideas flourish. Still, the lines, "Yet we worship hate and Pray for death Under the guise ...
Jun 16, 2008 -
Re: Broadway Queen
She was a Broadway queen, beaten and left out in the snow. A child of fairgrounds and whistles. I was a convert of what I should not know, Going all ...
Jan 29, 2008 -
Re: The sky flashes Zeus’s golden lightning
A very well written piece. Thoroughly enjoyed the images created and the way it flowed was faultless. One small thing that perhaps I didn’t think fitted was the contrast in ...
Jan 28, 2008 -
Re: Roses Cannot Die
I actually quite liked this. It's short and simply but works. Maybe the images used are a bit confusing but I think I got what it was about and certainly ...
Jan 27, 2008 -
Re: Flat 17
Hey just a short piece I wrote, any criticism welcome and hope you enjoy. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- He found her in flat 17. Its door lay op
Jan 27, 2008 -
Re: Sylvia Plath
I wrote my sixth-year dissertation on her poetry and I always saw it as magical one moment and then quite bland the next. Sometimes it just can't really be figured ...
Jan 27, 2008 -
Re: Reasons
I contemplate asking him about the broken Links; The endless gap in between. I wish to peruse the truth Out from where it lies dormant; torn. His manuscript of life ...
Jan 27, 2008 -
Re: temptation
It is nicely written but seems to be a bit confused. At the start you call the sheets 'sordid' which doesn't give the reader the idea of the love that ...
Jan 27, 2008 -
Re: Green Eyes
It's a nice piece to read but there are some things that I think could be a bit better. One thing I noticed was that you used quite a few ...
Jan 27, 2008 -
Re: Hello
Hey, I'm a journalism student but have been writing other things for a few years now. At school its easier to get stuff read and to ask any good English ...
Jan 27, 2008
